Alfonsus ll Narrative writing

This is my first draft.

So I went to the beach with my cousins on Saturday. The names of my cousins were Jack, Jacob, Fonzie, they were all 9 years old. So when we got to the beach our mum gave us some money in case it gets really hot and they want ice- cream, she told us that she will be here at 1 : 00 in the afternoon at this same spot. After a little while of walking on the beach we set everything up, we brang tents, snacks, camp chairs, and beach umbrellas. When we were all set up we went for a little swim while Jack was reading a math book for his test on Monday so he really had to study hard. When it was 12 : 40 the boys packed up everything to get ready to leave, and when they finished packing up they went to buy some ice - cream. Jack had Vanilla, Jacob had banana, and Fonzie had hokipoki. When it was 1 : 00 mum was here and then we ran to the car fighting who will sit at the front, mum got angry and “ all of you guys hop at the back” so we all went to the back fighting saying  “that was your fault”.